Actually dude, I'm not too familiar with all of this Slender Man stuff you've been adding to the wikia and I'm not sure exactly what you want me to do, but I think you got this since you know what you're doing, so keep it up.
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Hey. I hope you are doing well. I just wanted to stop by ask if you could leave feedback for Taking Toby to the Works by Saturday night. It is for a project I am working on, and I do have a deadline this time around, so I'd really appreciate it if you could. Just your usual comments will be fine. That is all I need, so if you can thank you. I am going to ask Mays and Brandon most likely, and anyone is welcome really. The more the better. Thanks!
Hey there, MainLineEngines. I just happened to have a read of your story and here are my thoughts.
First off, the portrayal of your characters was great as usual. James being vain as usual and not wanting to take Toby to the Steamworks seems typical of him. I thought it was funny how he and Henry pretended to be sick to get out of taking Toby, then Sir Topham Hatt called their bluff and they cut the act and went to work.
Also, I really liked how James changed during the episode. At first, he was being selfish and didn’t want to help Toby, but then as the story progressed, he put aside his arrogant and self-centered persona aside to help Toby and enjoyed it. That’s what I always liked about James: despite his ego, he knows when to put it aside and be a really useful engine. So good job there.
Lastly, I thought your concept about engines taking Toby to the Steamworks was interesting. I never really thought about that before, but considering the events of Time for Trouble and the fact that Toby has small water tanks, it makes sense for the engines to help him the rest of the way so he doesn’t breakdown on the mainline again. So good concept there.
In conclusion, good job again. Good character developments, interesting plot devices, and nice to see that old James-Toby rivalry/friendship again. It was also nice seeing James learning a lesson and going out of his way to be a really useful engine once again.
That’s all I have to say for now, so keep up the good work and I’ll see you next time!!!
Thanks for your comments. It is nice to get some more comments and I asked specifically this time because I am using this story for a writing class. But what is interesting is that, you know the characters and locations. Like, you know how steep Gordon's Hill or how Toby has small water capacity but to others, I have to fill them in. Still, your comments do make me aware of what I need to add for others. That is why I asked you this time around and I very much appreciate it.
You know, I had never thought of this concept before but sometimes, you can invent a plausible railway-related scenario. Thomas and Bertie and Mind that Bike are some of these. Upon looking over RBTL again, Christopher Awdry mentions that tram engines did travel every now and then to Stratford. Then, there's the one that got stuck and was the basis for Double-Header. I reasoned that the Fat Controller after that, decided to have James or Henry take Toby to the Works on their stopping trains. So yeah, sometimes there's not one particular incident but you can some simple problems like burst safety-valves or failed injectors and it helps with the writing process.
Again, thanks for the feedback, and I'll see you around.
Hey, thanks for leaving feedback for Christmas with Friends. Sometimes I can't leave comments for whatever reason, so I thought I'd just reply back here, 'cause I do appreciate it.
So once again, thanks for the comments, they really help. I just want to say that these episodes have been fun, and I very much look forward to continuing them in future. Still not sure what to do, but at least I've a page listing them all at least. And yeah, I like to ask for feedback 'cause I never know if it might trigger more story ideas. Everyone has different ways to come up with story ideas. For me, it can be a comment from you or even my friends and family. Story ideas have come from many places is all I can say! So, after thinking about it, I figured it would be nice to see Thomas a bit more on Edward's line. It was a nice opportunity to see Thomas in a different environment, new sights and such. Plus, it is also nice to have episodes arcs as was very common in series one and two. It was a good idea and I went along with it. Heed my words, never let a good idea go to waste. I almost did for Thomas and the Avalanche. Now I can't believe I held the update back. And its not that the original was bad, I quite liked it, but the new idea if you've seen, for me is just even better.
I'm glad you enjoyed this episode that ties this arc together. Looking back, it does lack action, but there is humour as you pointed out and it does have some sweet moments. Once again I want to stress Thomas-Edward dynamic. It was really shown in TAB and just wish could be shown more. Personally I like it. It is beneficial for both characters. Edward is almost perfect. So what? His mentor role creates plenty of story opporunities. Repeated. Maybe. But some lessons are worth repeating. I think many people have someone they rely on for help or advice or such. And I'm sure I've explained the importance and lasting of the moral in many of Edward's story which is why he's so memorable and I've related it to real-life so I won't bother here. Basically, by continuing the saga, I was once again able to showcase Thomas and Edward and that was great.
Once again, thanks for reading through. I hope you enjoyed Christmas and are having a great start to the year. 75th anniversary of the brand and it's glad I'll be to celebrate it with this community.
Hey MainLineEngines! Sorry for the late response (been busy with my own series and other things), but your very welcome for my feedback. I’m glad that they were helpful and I really did think your episodes regarding Edward and Thomas on his branchline were written pretty well.
Also, I completely agree with you about never letting a good idea go to waste: even if you think it might be bad, just go fir it and see what happens. Believe me, there were a few my episodes that I thought they were not going to be good (i.e. A Friend in Ferdinand), but then they turned out to be just fine and people liked them. So good for you for trying out your episodes with Thomas on Edward's Branchline.
By the way, I like how you’re adding screenshots from the television series to your episodes lately. Kind of gives us a better idea of what’s happening in your episodes, so good idea there too.
Lastly, I hope you had a Merry Christmas too and your New Year is going well too and here’s to 75 years of our favorite blue tank engine and (hopefully) many more years to come :)
Hey there OliverDuckandToad11, thanks for asking. I’ve actually been thinking about doing a special for my series for a while and this year, I’m planning on doing it.
The special I had in mind would be similar to the movie “It’s a Wonderful Life” and Thomas would be the main character. I don’t want to spoil too much, but let’s just say a few surprise characters would make an appearance that don’t appear in Thomas, are related to the series in a way.
It would also be a Christmas special as well, so it would be released in December, so we’re going to have to wait a while. I want to finish my first season before I do the special as well, but I promise when the time comes, the special will be good and I’m sure you’ll like it :)
Hi there. I just wanted to say that I think your stories are all wonderfully written and I really like them. I think you're a wonderful writer, and I would like to invite you to my Thomas fanfic wiki (I have my own series on this wiki, I'm just not on here very much anymore). The link for my wiki is below:
Thank you so much :) I'm glad you like my stories and you think I'm a great writer. I really appreciate that. Also, thanks for the invitation to your wiki. I checked it out and it looks pretty interesting. I like how the stories have a transcript option (seems like that will help with visualizing the scenes and cutting back the narrator's lines) and I might join it, but I'll probably have to think about it. What kind of freedom/rules would I have for that wiki if I were to join?
Hey there again, getting back to you on your offer. I thought about it and after reading the rules, I think I will join it at some point. There are a few story ideas I have that have already been used on this wikia in some form by other users and if I don’t have permission to do them here because of being too similar, I might write them on your wikia (with your permission, of course).
For now, I’m still planning on finishing my first season on this wikia and then I’ll decide which stories can be here and on your wikia.
Hey there, Mays. I just finished reading yours and OliverDuckandToad11's story and here's what I have to say.
First and foremost, you both really captured the spooky atmosphere in this episode. James' story about the Girl Hunter literally sent shivers down my spine and this ghost sounds really creepy and intimidating. The way he kind of appears out of nowhere right in front of everyone and then starts chasing them was definitely a very spooky idea. So, good work there.
Second, I liked the idea of having a female cast. You don't get too many episodes like that in the series and the idea of having Mavis, Emily, and Rosie as the main characters was a great idea. Also, I really liked Mavis' bravery towards the ghost and how you made her the sensible one in this trio. I feel like in the current series, the writers have really established Mavis as a mature character now and learned from her mistakes when she first came to the railway. So you and OliverDuckandToad11 did an excellent keeping her personality parallel to the current series. Good work as well.
However, although I liked this episode, I have to agree with what TheLocoLover said on that page and that the ending was very abrupt. The three females successfully concurred the ghost and then the episode pretty much ends with that (I know it ends at Ulfstead Castle, but nothing else happens). I was kind of expecting: Mavis, Emily, and Rosie to feel proud of themselves for taking down that ghost and they promised to never be scared again; a subtle implication that the ghost would return someday; Emily returns to the sheds and tells everyone about her night, possibly spooking James. Otherwise, I still like the fact that the ghost disappears after the three engines charge at it.
Overall, despite the abrupt ending, you and OliverDuckandToad11 did a great job on this episode and definitely one of the better Halloween epsiodes I have ever read. So kudos to you both. Final rating, 9/10.
About the ending it was a bit of a rush to finish it by Halloween and i dont have to many chances to give time to typing stories with my work scedual. I do thank you for takeing time to read and review it.
Hey there! I just read your story and I really enjoyed it. I like the fact that you named Mays after yourself and you gave some background to his character. I also like the connection between him and Rosie as well, almost seems like they are more of a couple than her and Thomas! Your use of references work well here too and I like how you made it similar to Sleeping Beauty (from the television series). I think this search was more interesting than that one. So overall, I would give it a 9.5/10. Good job, dude.
I thought it was pretty good, but also, I think you made it too much like Pop Goes the Diesel because almost every line is copied from that episode (but if that was your intention, then that's okay). Also, I like how you chose Rosie and Daisy for Duck and Diesel's roles respectively and they work out well, though I'm not sure if Daisy would want to try pulling cars. Also, Rosie joking at the end seems like something she would do. So overall, it was a good episode. 8.5/10
I wanted to just change up the characters, i've done 9 other alteratinos to the R.W.S stories. They will be up as soon as possible.
Update: I just uploaded Daisy's Devious Deed, and A clean shave for Rosie, can you give your opinion.